Let’s Pretend

Inspired by a poem by Katy

Let’s pretend we can breathe
         the thickening fog around us.
Let’s pretend the line break was
         merely another form of communication.
Let’s pretend there are still moments
         left to be made past February.
Or, we can be old drinking buddies
         trading shrapnel stories and shots,
or we can make up stories about
         the sparse times, the dust bowl.
Let’s pretend - just for an hour or two -
         that any of that is possible.

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Posted August 4th, 2006 in main. Tagged: .

4 comments:

  1. katy:

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    (my cat just typed all that obvious cat-speak following “am”… i thought i’d leave it, he gets a little offened when i delete his work)

    like i was saying… i am absolutly honored and gobsmacked that you took to the poem so wholly and recreated it here. it’s one of the highest forms of flattery to me because it’s how i connect with poets (most of the time the uber famous and dead type ones) who i admire.

    thank you so much

    and i think what max was trying to say was that he agreed that your last line was miles better than mine… hense all the 9’s

    best always

    katy

    August 5th, 2006 at 7:30 pm
  2. daniel:

    Katy, thanks a lot! I always worry when I take a form or idea and make it my own: some poets and fans of dead poets hate it.

    But I was honestly awestruck by yours and simply had to internalise it!

    *dan (who doesn’t know about that whole last line thing ;)

    August 5th, 2006 at 10:24 pm
  3. katy:

    the last line thing…

    i don’t feel that the last line of my version works when read out loud… it throws off the rhythm (i feel anyway).

    my last line sort of sticks out. yours fits perfectly.

    nothing to do with meaning, all to do with sound.

    August 6th, 2006 at 8:55 am
  4. Ringing of the Bards VIII: Red / Green / Blue at Naked and Ashamed:

    [...] Katy of Something Katy made me choose between four different poems this week. I went with the most familiar to me, because who doesn’t like familiar things? She writes in “Let’s Pretend”, [...]

    August 13th, 2006 at 6:54 pm

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